Screenplay Writing Competition

A lot of youths complain about Nollywood story lines but many choose not to write screenplays even though they blog stories pretty well. The biggest reason for this is, we all think that script writing is harder than fiction. And so, we all resort to blogging amazing stories instead. What this competition is about, is showing that screenplay writing isn’t all that hard.
The rule is pretty simple, just point out the errors in this script.
Clue: it is not the suck-ass H/Nollywood storyline.
The winner gets to win a pair of white Chuck Taylor sneakers. Now I know that the prize might not be in Don Jazzy’s category but you are not composing or dancing, just pointing out errors.


FADE IN:

EXT. ST. PETE BEACH – DAY

The beach is a little crowded. TOM, 26, at the beach bar, sips a cocktail as MARY-ALICE, 25, walks up to the bar.

                      MARY-ALICE
                 (motioning to the bartender)
              A glass of lemonade please.

                      TOM
              Hot day isn't it.

                      MARY-ALICE
              It most definitely is.
              96 degrees, the last
              time I checked.

The BARTENDER, 34, hands Mary-Alice her drink. She takes a slug at first and subsequently sips the rest. Tom watches her and could not help being intrigued.

                     TOM
              Hi, my name is Tom.

                     MARY-ALICE
              Nice to meet you, my name
              is Mary-Alice.

Tom phone RINGS. He whips it out.
                     TOM
              I would be there in few minutes.

He snaps the flip phone shut, fishes for his wallet and puts a 20 on the counter.
                 (turning to Mary-Alice)
             I got to run, but I would
             love to continue this later.
             I know this might be too
             forward or fast but I would
             really like to know you better.
             What do you say, Hurricane
             restaurant at 8.


                     MARY-ALICE
             You know what, sure.

                                                                                                                                                     2.
INT. RESTAURANT – NIGHT
Dinnertime: the restaurant is crowded. Tom sits at a table for two, by the window. Two red roses lay on the table. A WAITRESS walks up to him.

                     WAITRESS
              Are you ready to order, Sir.

                     TOM
              Not yet, I am waiting for
              someone. Thanks though.

                     WAITRESS
              Okay, just call one me
              when you are ready to order.

20 minutes later, Tom checks the time and decides that he had been stood up. As he stand up to leave, Waitress walks to him.

               Pardon me, are you Tom
               waiting for a certain
               Mary-Alice.

                    TOM
               Yes, why?

                    WAITRESS
              She asked that you be giving
              this note.

She passes him a folded note. He takes, unfolds and reads it.

INSERT: THE NOTE

Which reads: “Sorry I couldn't make it. Family emergency, hope you understand. Call me at 843-001-1110 by 11, so I can apologize properly.


INT. HOUSE – NIGHT

Tom contemplates whether he should call Mary-Alice or not. But he figures why not. He fishes for the note and dials the number.

                      TOM
              Hello?

INTERCUT TOM AND MARY-ALICE

                    MARY-ALICE
              Hi, Tom
 
                                                                                                                                                             3.

                    TOM
              What makes you think
              it's Tom.

                    MARY-ALICE
              It is 11 pm., isn't it.

                     TOM
              I guess so. So what was
              the family emergency about.

                     MARY-ALICE
              I know it sounds crazy but I
              really had a family emergency.
              I had to rush my nephew to the
              ER.

                     TOM
              How is he now?

                     MARY-ALICE
              He's a little trooper.

They talk. Mary-Alice yawns.

                     TOM
             I better be a gentleman and
             allow you to sleep.

                     MARY-ALICE
             Thanks, would you like to meet
             me at the Clear-water Beach.
             Thank God for Saturdays. This
             time, I am paying for the
             drinks.

                      TOM
             Not bad, what time do you want
             to meet.

                      MARY-ALICE
              Would 4 be good?

                      TOM
              Alright, it's a date then.

                                                                                                                                                         4.

EXT. CLEAR-WATER BEACH – DAY

The beach is crowded. TOM, at the beach bar, sips a cocktail as MARY-ALICE walks to the bar.

                      MARY-ALICE
           Why did I know, I would
           find you at the bar.

                      TOM
           Why was I sure, you would
           walk up to the bar looking
           for a certain gentleman. What
           would you have.

                     MARY-ALICE
           I am paying, ain't I.

                     TOM
           Yeah, sure, whatever.

                     MARY-ALICE
           Then I would have a white
           sangria.

                     TOM
           Fancy, hun.

They chat till sunset.

           So, how about a real date.
           Next Saturday. And please
           don't stand me up this
           time. Go easy on a guy's
           ego.

                     MARY-ALICE
             (right hand raised)
           I wouldn't, scout's honor.
           That would probably be the
           last time you get stood up
           by me. At least, until you
           show your douche-bag
           personality. Then, if that
           happens, you would be.

                      TOM
           Great, because that would
           never happen.
                                            FADE OUT.


So, find the errors and comment below from now till November 11.  

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